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Dear Mick,
       I am writing to invite you to my birthday party. I think it would be a good idea if you could join us for the celebration .
       The birthday party will take place in my home. It will begin at 19:00 on Sunday.The party will last for about three hours, from 19:00  to 22:00 . I want to introduce some friends to you. At that time you can meet mingle with new friends at the  party ; it will enrich your social life. I am sure that you will enjoy an unforgettable moment there.
     I am looking forward to your early reply. My phone number is 13137239681. I really hope you can join us .
                                                                                                                                         Yours Li Ke

This essay is a personal invitation letter to Mick, inviting him to a birthday party. Let's evaluate it according to the scoring criteria provided:

1. **Content:** The letter covers the main points one would expect in an invitation: the occasion (birthday party), the time and place (Sunday at 19:00 at the writer's home), the duration (three hours), and the social aspect of meeting new friends. It also includes a polite request for an early reply and provides a contact number.

2. **Structure:** The structure of the essay is clear and appropriate for a letter. It begins with a polite opening, presents necessary details in a logical order, and concludes with a closing statement.

3. **Language Use:** The language used is generally accurate and appropriate for the task. The vocabulary is suitable, with some minor errors such as "meet mingle with new friends" where "and" is missing between "meet" and "mingle," and a space issue before the semicolon. Additionally, the sentence “I think it would be a good idea if you could join us for the celebration” could be more direct or rephrased for clarity and simplicity, e.g., "I hope you can join us for the celebration." Other small improvements could enhance fluency and formality.

Based on the criteria:

- The letter fulfills the task well, with all key content points addressed clearly.
- There are minor language errors, but they do not obstruct understanding.

**Score: 25-30 (First Tier)**

**Suggestions for Improvement:**

1. Correct minor language errors:
   - Add "and" between "meet" and "mingle."
   - Ensure proper spacing before punctuation: ";".

2. Improve sentence fluency:
   - Consider rephrasing sentences for conciseness or better flow, e.g., “I hope you can join us for the celebration.”

Overall, the invitation is well-crafted with only minor improvements needed for full marks.