The need for jobs will make us develop our industries, which in turn causes environmental problems.修改原因:原句中缺少引导语来连接两个句子之间的关系,造成了表达不清晰的问题。使用从句来引导,可以更加清楚地表达出两个句子之间的逻辑关系。
分析句子成分:
So it is only natural that making mistakes in your effort to reach your dreams is considered a must, and you shouldn’t worry about that as you may get a lot of advantages out of your mistakes.